Poetry about Poetry ... original or previously published poetry, December 2000
How do I love thee
Liz,
Welcome to the forum. Now, your sonnet:
It shows some promise, though I've minor nits.
In some places it seems to wear a bonnet
Of pious primness, yet in others it's
Got real passion. Some specifics: there's
A rather bumpy rhythm in line four;
Too many 'and's throughout. 'I love thee' wears
A little thin, perhaps. And are you sure
About those Spurious Capitals. Big words
Like 'soul' or 'Being' are dangerous: use spar-
ingly. I think this poem could sing like birds
if only you would take a bit more care.
In short, it needs some work to make it neater.
So good luck with your re-write.